Today is basically my only day to get any homework done, so I decided to knock the whole essay out while I was in the library. I was able to find a lot of good sources, though it was hard to narrow down which ones I wanted to use and which directions I would take for the paper. Eventually, I decided on focusing on the uses and a little of the history of metaphysical conceit. I also released my inner grammar nerd and researched the uses of commas and semicolons and their distinct uses.
I'll admit, it was kind of hard to find a not-so-recent journal article! At least, harder than I expected. But it happened, so that's all that matters.
Today has been really productive, though I don't love sitting in the library forever, especially when it's such a great day outside ;) Maybe this is what Vivian felt like as a college student.
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Wednesday, February 24, 2016
Tuesday, February 2, 2016
We All Know Shakespeare Loved a Good Song (And Probably a Good Thesis)
For my thesis re-writing, I chose the essay titled "A 'Most Happy Wrack': Achieving Musical Harmony in Twelfth Night".
Original: The writer of this essay places their thesis rather straightforwardly as the opening statement. It reads, "Shakespeare’s clever use and knowledge of music is one of the things that distinguishes his plays from his contemporaries." This seems to be a sort of causal claim. However, the following sentences in the paragraph seem to be much more specific, and make one guess if the original claim should perhaps be narrowed down in order to be believable.
Edited: "Shakespeare's knowledge and use of music and musical references in Twelfth Night is one thing that helps to set apart this play from many other contemporary plays." This claim, also causal, takes the exact same idea, applies it more specifically to what the essay is actually about, and becomes both more believable and more interesting.
Original: The writer of this essay places their thesis rather straightforwardly as the opening statement. It reads, "Shakespeare’s clever use and knowledge of music is one of the things that distinguishes his plays from his contemporaries." This seems to be a sort of causal claim. However, the following sentences in the paragraph seem to be much more specific, and make one guess if the original claim should perhaps be narrowed down in order to be believable.
Edited: "Shakespeare's knowledge and use of music and musical references in Twelfth Night is one thing that helps to set apart this play from many other contemporary plays." This claim, also causal, takes the exact same idea, applies it more specifically to what the essay is actually about, and becomes both more believable and more interesting.
More Thesis Stuff
I chose to look at the thesis for "The Hypocrisy of Henry V." I am far from being an expert at this thesis-labeling thing, so feel free to correct me wherever it's needed.
Original: "His hypocrisy, then, must be more the result of an awareness--calculations rather than simple charisma, diligence rather than luck--and this is what makes Shakespeare's King Henry such a capable king."
This seems to be causal claim. He explains that King Henry's self-awareness causes his hypocrisy and these things are what cause him to be a capable and successful king.
Edited: "Shakespeare's King Henry is hypocritical but also aware of his abilities and responsibilities and he is purposeful in his actions, which make him a very capable king."
I used this as a definition claim. It focuses more on King Henry's character and his traits rather than what caused those traits to be or how they are shown in the play.
Original: "His hypocrisy, then, must be more the result of an awareness--calculations rather than simple charisma, diligence rather than luck--and this is what makes Shakespeare's King Henry such a capable king."
This seems to be causal claim. He explains that King Henry's self-awareness causes his hypocrisy and these things are what cause him to be a capable and successful king.
Edited: "Shakespeare's King Henry is hypocritical but also aware of his abilities and responsibilities and he is purposeful in his actions, which make him a very capable king."
I used this as a definition claim. It focuses more on King Henry's character and his traits rather than what caused those traits to be or how they are shown in the play.
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